Campaign sketches Thread

A couple of campaign sketches (briefings) before missions for something *wink* related to (spoilers) Mexica/Aztecs, Toltecs, Zapotecs and Maya:

Sketch 1
Portalgate was opened. And we escaped, escaped from our eternal oppressors from the land of great beauty but also great suffering, escaped with nothing but our Oversoul to guide us... and a new sun to behold.

Sketch 2
This the chase of the sun eagle has begun. All eagles will walk the sky this day.

To go for more poetic style or to go for a clearer and more straightforward one? That is the question.

I'm a little confused on what you're going for.
What campaign?

LOL, a game campaign. I won't tell you the game genre, it should be clear enough for some now.

Sketch 1, but it's a bit -too- short. It's, from the sounds of it, your first mission, so there should be some background given.

Isn't this supposed to be a campaing pitch script?, not a sketch. A sketch is something you draw.

Edited by: Ronnie42

ronnie42 wrote: Isn't this supposed to be a campaing pitch script?, not a sketch. A sketch is something you draw.

Vignettes. The idea is to have popup windows at the start of the campaign mission detailing what happened before (or during the time between missions) in a very few words.

Thanks Reqieumthefallen.

Sketch 1 elaborated a bit
Quakes riddled the whole land, and the dust rose to the heavens screaming for the punishment of the Elysian people. Its ground shook and fell, devoured by an ever encompassing ocean. In the distant plains, a monolithic portalgate was opened.

Running through fields condemned to underwater hell, we escaped, escaped from our eternal oppressors! Escaped from the land of great beauty but also great suffering, escaped with nothing but our Oversoul to guide us... and a new sun to behold, in a world yet unknown, to find home and respite.

"Sketch 1" sounds better, as for the style, I think it will be a lot better in a poetic style.