The Second Tiberium War is a standalone redefinition modification for Command & Conquer: Tiberian Sun.
Outcast Covenant Backstory
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Here is the backstory for the new third faction and their ties to the Second Tiberium War universe.
I'm not sure about this. I think the guy deciding to move against two world super powers (one is a worldwide militant cult and another is a defense organization backed by multitude developed countries GDP) out of the blue is a bit... underdeveloped. I humbly suggest, as a start, making their faults in his personal matter more prominent, like Nod setting off the bomb and GDI provoking them to do so, as a basic example.
Like the symbol tho.
Yes, I did forget to mention (I will add it) the explosion was caused by weapon fire from a GDI and Nod skirmish.
I like how this helps to make the mutants less of a monolithic organization, they are, afterall, just... people. People who have been 'forgotten' and left to fend for themselves when GDI didn't care and when Nod didn't want to bother.
I agree with EgoJisto in that perhaps Sheang needs to have personal stakes in this, and so do his followers, that is something I'd add. Who wants to kill and die for someone else's personal war, you know? For GDI, it's a fight for safety and security, to further their ambition to normalize the world and return it to what it once was; for the Brotherhood, it's a revolution, they are overthrowing the status quo, and it's a cult, they are doing things that further their warped ideas of transformation into a new species.
We know how the Outcast Covenant are able to stand up to the two factions, but what does this group of mutants fight for?
I reworded it and it should now make more sense. My writing skills are a work in progress. :)
I like the story! Thank you for sharing it, even when it was WIP. I look forward to seeing the Outcast Covenant's tale.
Not sure I like the emphasis here, like, the big corporate backer leader, feels more like some revenge project of an influential project who found likeminded recruits whereas faction name, presentation so far and goals make it sound like it's a more organized grassroots faction that may be disparate.
Imo I'd rather write up about tiberium mutants, hardship they experienced and how they banded up, then have Ysunaga show up in second half as this big break bankroller, or maybe have him written as having steadily pivoted from a humanitarian aid provider to someone who's doing everything he can down to securing weapons?
I agree now that I think about it.
I revised it with more emphasis on a mutant rebel group fighting for justice and less corporate fluff.
The original backstory of The Forgotten in TS portrayed the faction as decentralized groups of mutants federated together. However, the introduction of Sheang will likely change this aspect since the Outcast Covenant is primarily owned and controlled by one person.
In my opinion, the process of re-aligning the mutants may not proceed smoothly, and there could be opposition to Sheang's actions among the mutants, which will require his attention, even though he's busy dealing with Nod and GDI already. Campaign stories that explores how the Covenant adapts itself to the decentralized nature of The Forgotten would be beneficial, at least from my perspective.