You wake up in the middle of the night with no memories from the past. Walk around your house and collect things that can help you to remember.
too short, only story telling, no actual content to explore
This was a decent start. Nice level design and atmosphere to befit such a melancholic story. However there are quite a few details that need to be pointed out that broke the immersion in what otherwise could have been a much better experience with a higher rating.
Pros (especially commendable for a first mod):
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+ Level Design
+ Atmosphere
+ Nice details in some places
+ Usage of custom assets
+ Fitting music
Cons (going into more detail for future improvements):
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- The player movement is majorly impeded, the intention must be to provide a slower, narrated experience, when in reality it feels like a forceful drag. Changing BOTH move and runspeed to 0.8/0.7 would perfectly do the trick for gameplay and would still keep an accurate feeling for the player character's state.
- No puzzles besides key quests, which is the number 1 first mod mistake. The description promised the player to find keepsakes, but other than notes and some paintings in the environment nothing interactive was provided.
- Barely any cutscenes or events, which would fit a short narrated story very well.
- Despite using some custom assets, many are packed alongside the mod that end up being unused, needlessly increasing the download size.
- The story itself could use a lot of refinement, and I'm opening a whole section for this.
Story problems / suggestions:
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- Even after the proofreading there are some grammar and sentence casting mistakes, and the text in poem-like notes is often truncated in a bad way.
- The voice acting doesn't feel immersive at all
- The emphasis about sadness is put on drinking and smoking a lot, and addressing the lost sister countless times in similar ways, instead of more thorough feelings a person experiences in such a situation. A few brief notes address self pity and loneliness in a makeshift way however.
- More background should have been provided about the characters' past so players can better relate or feel touched by their fate.
- Being russian yourself, more such environmental details and local folklore could be added to aid the story's depth.
Wish you the best of luck for future endeavours, or even any updates related to this one. Feel free to hit me up for more suggestions regarding such efforts! You definitely have potential, and tackling a story-focused experience for the first time is definitely a risky and difficult task!
Decent writing and lore. I did the proofreading for this mod, however theres still a bunch of misspelling and stuff
Atmosphere was okay, theres a bunch of details and it looks nice in some parts. However the lighting and other details could be improved, plus some of the decals and objects are flying off certain furniture like the table in the dining room, etc. Plus the mod file size is like 2 GB when uncompressed, its because of the amfp asset pack being included in the whole mod despite it just using one short map
Also i feel like the player should walk a little faster but not to the point where he can just skip through everything and speedrun the entire mod lol, i feel like a bunch of amnesia players tend to just skip through everything instead of getting immersed. It might not be true because it's just my perspective, i havent been participating that much in the amnesia community because of dramas and whatnot, but lets not get too sidetracked
Overall pretty decent, it just needs more tension; the key-hunting and usage of notes for the lore should be kept to a minimum. Also the lack of monsters really just makes it less scarier, i was thinking maybe the author could add some interesting moments, puzzles and hallucinations; plus, dont end it with a cliffhanger (I can't spoil the rest so you probably need to play the mod for yourself)
I can see this mod having potential for a proper full-blown remake which extends the lore even further into new heights, I really wish i could see what would happen next instead of simply rolling the credits
Pros:
- For a first mod, detailing and atmosphere is amazing
- Voice acting and lore is good too for a short mod like this
Cons:
- Player walks too slowly all the time, never do this in mods lol
- No real puzzles, just keys, cause it's focusing on story that much
For a first mod it's actually interesting, but definitely make a longer one which doesn't just focus on story next time, nice. :)