Do you have what it takes to escape the big house that you're captured in? No one in the past has done it, will the first one be you. Variation of puzzles (one didn't even need scripting), horror, and unexpected events. Download this and get an unforgettable horror experience!
Positives:
- A story line
- Some creative ideas
- No lame scares
Negatives:
- Story is bland and very short
- Level design is glitchy in every possible way
- No details, almost no music, no particle effects, etc
- Not scary at all
- No challange
What to improve:
Level design:
Make sure walls are not going through other walls, entities isn't floating in the air or collide witch each other, add more details and more effects.
The first bedrooms were actually not that bad. No details at all, but not bad either. After that the level design just went downhill.
The rooms are either pitch black or 100% bright (you need to learn how to use lamps and pointlights, or at least edit the boxlight so it isn't 100% white).
Puzzles:
You have a working crowbar quest and two working shelf quests, although the levers are fully visible (almost like the castle creator didn't even try to hide the path in the first place) and the rest are key quests. Good, but since the items are so extremly easy to find, I did not see them as a challange whatsoever.
Be more creative, more variation of quests and try to hide the items a little better so we actually need to search for them.
Overall:
Add more scares (they don't have to be "lame" scares), make it longer and most of all, try to make the story more intresting. The storyline is actually not that bad, but the three notes explaination why you are in the mansion is only in one map and so short it could easily be one medium long note instead.
Conclusion:
The difference between troll stories and this story is that it looks like you actually tried. But you have a long way to go before you should upload a story again. Play other stories, check inside the offical maps or watch some youtube tutorials and practise and I am sure you can make something awesome, you have potential, but for now, it's very bad and not recommended.
2/10 - Very bad
This is just crap expecrience to play.
Yeah, these days I think developers or "New ones to make something at their first story" just don't think straight or learn anything from other developers just making their own horrible idea or just rush whole story.
Yeah, why bother making something decent? Let's just rush everything with level design as a noobie. I'm just so disappointed playing trough this no offense. You are not the first who releases "Bad, glitching maps with no effort whatsoever" it's just repeating to play these maded 1-4 days max. maps. and just making everything fast, as I can see there is tons of flickering textures, glitching through the walls, nonsense level design, awful atmosphere first dark as hell, then bright, then dark and just confusing and breaking immortal atmosphere immediately. Nothing to enjoy.
Shortly this is just badly maded, no effort on maps, couple monsters and there are just chasing you and even that's not working correctly how they should be. I can easily avoid those monsters and just rush this mod and finish less than 3 minutes easily. There is no challenge, no atmosphere to make playing enjoyable, story doesn't make sense and grammar is bad aswell.
BUT, remember i'm not to bark your mod, I'm always saying these things just to help you to improve from these mistakes and just start new mod again and just make maps carefully, atmospheric, add detailing a lot, unique scares and story. These are most important mods when making the mod. Seriously! If you continue like this, rushing things, not thinking clearly how your map works, you will get bad reviewers a lot more.
I hope you can understand why this is such a letdown, well.. at least you try and we get it. :)
1/10 - Pointless to play
Trash, seriously wtf is that ending? You jump over a wall to get out of bounds... and that's it. As for the rest of it it was ok, but not very good, very bland level design.
haha i let me friend play this story and he was realy scared
Not very long or scary. But it wasn't bad either.
it has some good scares i was a bit cheeped out i think its ok but not bad the bad thing is you don't give them the lantern at the start and at the prison part you gave me enough oil to play for 5 min then its dark as$%^& i think it can be worked on but nice job
It's one of the worst if not the worst cs i ever played.Walls placed very badly, if a monster came there was always a cupboard to hide.Also there was no point of hiding because monsters never despawned.
I scared two times once in the room, where is the crowbar the alexander pic. scared me and the last monster.
I liked the puzzles.
Also there was no music or ambiance in the game so it was boring and i hate the fact you gave tons of tinderboxes but you didn't placed torches or atleast candles to light.
I understand its your first map, but its still bad.
This custom story was not that great. You need to work a little harder because well look at the walls for yourself, add a few more jumpscares (please not the naked guys, it's stupid) because the custom story was really scary in the tinniest way. The monsters only scared me because the monsters chased me everywhere when they spawned lol. Anyway also add more welders especially when you're connecting two walls together. I can see through walls. You know that wall that you can go through with was kind of a smart thing but I realized you just had to turn it into a entity file, anyway, that wall, I already knew that I could go through it because I could SEE through it. Work a little harder next time. Most of the puzzles are fine though, I got stuck on a few but anyway, like I said.
I personally don't think this one is as awful as the others say, I've played much, much worse.
It has potential, but it has a lot of problems too. But this is your first custom story, right? It's actually pretty nice for your very first.
It's not as glitchy with scripts as a lot of custom stories I've played from first timers, that's a huge positive. Although there are a lot of wall and texture glitches. The story needs a little work as it's missing depth. The mapping in the beginning was alright but after the second map it started to get very small and very empty. The going from bitty maps to huge empty ones was a little annoying. Also the hallway maps were a little awkward. Lots of tinderboxes but absolutely no candles or anything to light was a little weird for me too.
It could use some music and maybe better monster placement. They were rather predictable. The last map with the stacking boxes, although I love stacking boxes, a ladder would've been a better choice for those who don't. It missed some challenges as well, running from monsters and finding keys and such is fine and dandy. But a good puzzle would've made it for me. As well as it being a bit longer, it only took me 5 minutes to complete.
All in all I have to say a 4/10, it wasn't that bad. It just needs work.
Very well, like I said, This CS is getting a 6/10 just for not having stupid scares
Now, I must say I agree with everyone else so far: Your CS has little work put on it. The walls overlapping each other and the overall map design isn't good at all. The story is put in 3 simple notes and doesn't say much but HEY! at least there is story.
Now, I'll help you how to improve EACH map so you can try again with this CS or just have something to look for when making your next.
I'll send you a PM.