Do you want to know more? Who are we?
Sand, steel and blood…
DUNE:Evolution: About one and a half years we stood hidden to improwe our modding skills, to fight with incompetency and laziness, and, I want to believe, sometimes we did it quite good... Anyway it's up to you whether we did or not... so, please, don't be shy... It would be very interesting for us to know your opinion about DUNE: Evolution and about our team?
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Great update guys ! i like the style of it, keep up the great work !
thx
Quality work, guys. Liking the style.
Pretty compelling story, however, if I may, a few tips. Be very thorough with the proofreading. Typos like "cknocked" don't hurt the understandability of the piece, but really stutter the mental imagery and suspense of disbelief.
"Only now he felt really down" is a great way to word it, except for the use of the word down. Down really underplays the sense of doom a Freman warrior would feel at the mortal damaging of a stillsuit, for them, it's almost shameful. It's more of a slang/vernacular word. Try some other words in its stead like "defeated" or make it a noun "the defeat". That's just an example, but other than those two things, this is truly superb writing, I doubt I've seen anything like it with any other mod. I'd go so far as to say this writing is better than the stories that come along with most games these days, even.
We had some doubts about the story, so we're glad that you liked it =)
As for the mistakes, we apologise for that, unfortunately, our English is not as good as we want, but we'll try to avoid such things in the future. It would be great if we could beforehand show our translations to someone who is a native English speaker and who knows artistic style.
So, what can you say? Maybe you'll help us, form time to time, to correct all the possible mistakes in the translations?
By the way, what can you tell about the article "Who are we?"
Evodune.com
does it have such mistakes?
Excellent look and feel so far guys. Nice work...