Comments - AnaseSkyrider

It's okay. I'm sorry for being a douche-bag about this. I got frustrated with a few things yesterday, so yeah. I'm better now, hence why I'm apologizing.

I'm just trying to help him improve his damn writing anyway. I seriously don't feel like dealing with this stupid crap. I asked him, he didn't mind, so I'm helping him out slightly. He was nice about it, I was trying to be nice and not annoying, and you're just ******* me off (in tandem with all the other crap that's bugging me today). There was really nothing else for me to say. I'm gonna comment on his stuff from time to time to point out some of the little things that he can correct (or use to improve his writing in the future), and I'm also going to do my normal commenting crap. It's not like I'm doing this INSTEAD of doing the normal interactions and compliments and questions and crap.

Puu.sh
Just read this >.>

You clearly missed the whole point of what I was doing. I didn't need or have anything to say. Here:

GOOD PROGRESS

Now **** off. (I'm in a bad mood)

I asked him on YouTube if he minded whether or not I critiqued his writing on his videos and articles. He was cool with it, so I wanted to give him help in at least one way that I knew how to do.

As I said: I'm posting the critiques of your article's writing on your article. So let's do this.

1. "When the titan got a target, his head and body will follow it."
While not grammatically incorrect, the phrasing is slightly awkward. Instead of "When the titan got a target", you should write "When the titan has a target".

2. "The first body part to follow the target is his head, and when it reach the angle limit, ..."
The weirdness here is in "... when it reach the angle limit, ..." because it should be "... when it reaches the angle limit, ...". The change is in "Reach" to "Reaches".

3. "... the whole body turn to face the player too."
There's two ways to correct this. You either write "... the whole body turns to face the player too." or you write "... the whole body will turn to face the player too.".

4. "This way, we can avoid having the head turning on itself, by 360 degrees."
The comma between "the head turning on itself" and "by 360 degrees" is not necessary.

5. "The eyes movement, as well as the body turn animation are not implemented yet, but that's something that I'd like to add in the future."
There should be a comma in between "as well as the body turn animation" and "are not implemented yet". You also should have added an apostrophe after "eyes" because you mean to use the possessive form of a plural quantity. You could also write it as "Eyes's".

6. "During attacks, the titan can follow player movement too."
I'm not sure if it's grammatically incorrect, but it sounds slightly less weird to say "player's movement" instead of "player movement" in this context.

7. "This way, when the titan is trying to catch, his hand will move depending of the player location."
Instead of writing "depending of the the player location.", you should write "depending on the player's location.". Note that I added a possessive property to "Player", but I changed "Of" to "On".

8. "To do that, I'm using blendspace in Unreal"
You should've added a period at the end of that sentence.

9. "Lastly, the titan is able to anticipate the player location so he can time better his attacks."
This should be written as "so he can better time his attacks." rather than "so he can time better his attacks.".

10. "Red spots in the following gif ..."
The beginning of this is slightly fragmented. Simply adding "The" before "Red spots" would work fine (but you should remove the capital 'R' from "Red" after doing so).

11. "If the spot is in the titan attack range, then he will start the attack."
You should have said "titan's attack range" instead of "titan attack range".

12. "The main reason is that all the gameplay features has not be implemented yet."
You should have written "have not been implemented yet." instead of "has not be implemented yet.".

13. "he will obtain an advantage over the titan, that need to be determined yet."
This last part should have been written as "which needs to be determined." instead of "that need to be determined yet.".

14. "Another thing that need to be taken in account, ..."
Simple correction: replace "Need" with "Needs". You also don't need the comma at the end of this portion because you can smoothly transition from one point to the next without it being confusing in English.

15. "but targeting a titan with several player should lower the difficulty too."
Since a player is an individual, and you're speaking of multiple players, you should have written "several players" instead of "several player". In English, most words work like this. Some words use the same word for the singular and plural version.

16. "And if I decide to add several difficulty level,"
Same thing as last time; you were speaking of multiple levels, so should should have written "several difficulty levels" instead of "several difficulty level".

That is all. I don't like how English deals with some of its rules for punctuation in quotes, so I use my own system, but I don't use it very consistently. Hopefully, that shouldn't be confusing.

Nice work with the Titan. I'm eager to see more as you develop the game, Guedin. I'm glad to see your clarifications on the Titan A.I., and you should probably let some of the people know what's going on with the A.I. in the YouTube video's comments, and link them to this page so they can read more.

Your writing skills have improved immensely, Guedin. Or, at least, you're trying harder. And one of your fans have noticed. Please take pride in the ability to write with great skill and grammatical correctness.

I had intended to get some preparation done before Aravind released the game, but fate turned out to be a... Well it rhymes with "witch"... Anyway, it's something that needs to be done during at least one of our updates- we need to make a guide of some sort.

We currently are not open-sourced and easily moddable, but we do have plans in the future to make the game as such. But for now, you're stuck with the game you get.