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Mularac!

25 of May? Why does it sound so familiar? ;)
As before, excellent work! Without the reader noticing you have introduced a lot of concepts in a really subtle way! The difference between dragons and humans that was missing from the previous post, their disliking for night and the cold, even the current state of affairs, you have given us a lot of details while keeping the reader hooked up! You even introduced the first god, which i have been waiting to read for what it seems like ages lol. Keep up the good work!
There was one tiny part that i did not fully understand:"semi-dios de la sabiduria" If he is the guardian god of the race (and as such the most important one for them?) speaking of him like an almost god of knowledge takes prestige from him, or so I think. Maybe you could add that latter when you give the reader the general view of all the gods and their powers?

Can´t wait for next post, which I truly hope is the mythology of your book!

Lots of Love,
Porcelain Doll

Mularac!
Honestly, amazing.
From all the introductions you have done and I have read in both Spanish and in English this is the best one. I could not take my eyes out of it, for every two lines there was something more gripping than before!
It is really difficult to make the reader from the very beginning of a novel to get into the character’s shoes, but you have truly achieved it! At the beginning, the dark and mysterious descriptions about the “ghost” city, his coronation and all the actual problems he had to deal with where enough to eager me to keep on reading; but when I got to the point where you start talking about his lovable and happy childhood I completely lost count of time or space! Seeing the world through his eyes, the remarks he made about his fathers eyes, how he imagined himself fighting imaginary enemies (simply adorable) or “watching” his father and his men fight in war, made me submerge in the world to the point that coming out of it so fast was a let down.(Maybe you could take advantage of tomorrow after physics to post a little more? )
Just my thought, but maybe you should add a space between the first talk about archangels “los Arcángeles se hicieron ver.-Enter-Sin más…” so that from the very beginning you emphasize how important they are and how their part in the battle do turn tactics around. Oh and you could take advantage that it is a re telling to add some metaphors and comparisons when you talk about “negrura” and “odio” so that those words are left exclusive for the description about the Archangels.
Got to go now and keep on studying physics, but could not go without commenting after reading it and liking it this much.
See you tomorrow!

Lots of Love,
Porcelain Doll
Pd:you coul also use the re telling to describe how one lung dragons are different from humans too.