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The Fatherless (WIP) (Groups : Writer's Club : Forum : Work in Progress : The Fatherless (WIP)) Locked
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Dragmod
Dragmod
Mar 15 2010 Anchor

Here is a small sample from a story I'm working on, and mostly I'm just looking for some suggestions on how I can improve my style of writing.

The Fatherless

War is a cruel reality,
That no one can run from.
One must pass through Hell,
To truly understand Heaven,
One must suffer pain,
In order to know joy.
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We are the Fatherless.
Pain, Suffering, Tears,
These things are ours.
This is our story,
Our lessions learned,
This is our Heritage.
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Our fathers left,
And our mothers wept.
But we were young,
And couldn't understand
...
Why.
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...to be continued


This is just the start, I have more written but I would like to make this part as strong as possible.
plus it would give me a good idea as to where I want to take the story.

Thanks

Lynn

Edited by: Dragmod
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