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Have you ever wanted to discus writing within the modding world? Trying to find someone to help edit or review your writing? Or perhaps just looking for a place to receive criticism? Then this may be the group for you. As this group is currently in development, some systems and details will be fleshed out in the near future. The forums are now open and set up for use. If you want to post your writing, go to the forums and (depending on length) post the writing itself or a link to it from elsewhere. An example will be posted momentarily. If you want to discuss a particular subject or style, start a thread in the forums.

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ghost59
ghost59
Jul 27 2011 Anchor

im working on my first sc fi horror book called sovo.
im new to making books i worked on my up coming game story mass wars and working a prequel for the game
i would like some tips.
heres a little bit of the story of sovo
I wake up in a hall way, cold and with no one near me. I get up and I'm by a window, I look out the window and say: where am I. I see nothing but space rocks and stars. I turn away from the window and I see this huge hulking creature right in my face, it picks me up with one hand and gets ready to cut me in half with the other. i closed my eyes hoping it was all dream but when I open them I realize its not a dream. boom!!!! it stabs me with its other hand. I fall down dead.
so tell what u think and what i can do to improve

Swanson420
Swanson420
Aug 9 2011 Anchor

Add more descriptions of the surroundings - and also describe how your character is FEELING while all this is going on.

ghost59
ghost59
Aug 9 2011 Anchor

alright thx

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