this is my story sorry but Mansion 2020 Will be dead so shto will develop this story called The Investigator I hope this story will go to you
So this custom story is really short, it takes around 10 mins to finish it. In the first level the design was cool (thsi is why its a 3/10 for me) but on the 2nd map the design was ****. No puzzles, only keys. The music in the 2nd map was SO annoying and bad. Same jumpscares, which is a bad thing. And I was lucky that I found the 3rd key easily because its super hidden. Oh and bad story. So overall I don't recommend trying it.
Positives:
- Custom music
- First map looks quite good
Negatives:
- Pictures on the mod page are irrelevant to the mod, or flat-out stolen
- Second map is horrible compared to the first one
- Grammar is horrible
- Story makes no sense
- Same scare over and over again
- Same find key objective over and over again
- No item description, or default "machine room key" description
- Nonsense ending
It's very clear to me that Secretial made the entire first map (level design) and you made the second, because the quality drops ten folds.
First map looks relatively well done. Lightning is alright, it looks quite appealing in general, not much bad to say about it really.
Once you enter the second map though, you will notice there's no door behind you if you turn around, lightning is horrific (way too bright or too dark, candle light are static cones, etc), the rooms are either very empty or filled with the same objects copy pasted 20 or so times, and at the end, you are greeted by this large empty room with nothing but a portrait of Alexander. A note tells you to go to the portrait and then the mod just ends. Nothing happens, it just ends.
I don't understand the story what so ever. Not only is the grammar on the level of a first grader, with no capital letters, dots, comas, or a decent understanding of the english language, but the story is like, you wake up somewhere. You don't know where you are, you must investigate. Oh look a key that spawns in a hallucination monster when picked up. Oh, another key that also spawns in a false monster. And another key, and another key. Oh, a portrait and that's it.
What was your vision? The purpose of this? I don't understand.
Last thing I want to bring up is the scare you use over and over again. I have played many mods before. I knew after seeing hallucination scares a couple of times, that you would keep using it over and over again. "Oh, it's THAT kind of mod is it? I see" was what I thought, and after that, the scares had no affect on me at all. Reusing the same thing over and over does not work. Doing the same puzzle over and over, is not fun. Seeing the same scare over and over, is not scary, it's just frustrating and mundane.
I see you put some effort into this. I do think you should have kept this mod to yourself as a learning experience only though. You lack too much skills when it comes to design, coding and story writing to really make something publicly for the time being. Keep practising and someday you may have something good to show!
Oh, and post screenshots of your mod. Using google images or screenshots from other games/mods will not attract much attention and it looks very lazy.
3/10
I have no idea, if this is a troll mod or not, but I'll review it like a regular custom story.
First of all this mod apparently was made in 2020, but looked like something made in 2012. Few rooms with random props, and keys, nothing else. Almost every time you pickup a key, a poofer chases you. Random rooms with red, blue and green lights. Room full of copy-pasted chairs and tables. I felt like in old pewdiepie amnesia video.
The story? There's no story, the notes are lying. Go to the room, pickup a key, go to the next room, pick up another key, go to the nexter room, go to marked place, win the game. Speaking of notes, they don't even have punctuation. Speaking of keys the author didn't even bother to rename the items, so we have two ,,machine room keys" and a few unnamed keys. Also DEAR CUSTOM STORY MAKERS PLEASE STOP PUTTING KEY ITEMS BEHIND BOOKS ON BOOKSHELVES IT'S NOT A PUZZLE IT'S ******* CHEAP AND ANNOYING!
But, for something that looks like a 2012 mod, it's not all bad:
-no texture glitches
-no teleporting naked guys
-no 24_iron_maiden.ogg
-rooms were not completly empty
-mod uses custom music
-lighting was acceptable
-the english was not that bad
So here's a 6/10 for minimal, but some sort of effort.
(Unless of course it's a troll mod, then I'm sorry, but my brain has difficulties in recognizing irony)