Comments - NoNinjasHere

D: You are a cruel master.

And why can't an editor write a story? I have spare time, I may as well use it.

Should I write my own story sometime? seeing as how everyone else is doing it and all...

goddammit, ascii art doesn't work -_-

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Hurrah for capitalist policies!

Never! We must not let him take over with peace! Man the cannons!

I concur.

You will be punished for your sins. Your crimes against humanity, they shall not be forgiven. Report to your nearest cleansing station for trial, or be dragged there by force.

D: What happened to the proofread version?

I agree, moar story is needed!

I'm sorry. I'm afraid I can't let you do that.
Please do not try that again, or the consequences will be punishing.

Every. Damn. Day.

There are no limits to the Book of NIKE. The Book of NIKE is endless. Resistance is futile. You will be assimilated.

This is good, except for the occasional slip of tense. E.g. sometimes you narrate in the past tense but suddenly switch to present tense. However, the story reads well, and the descriptive language is great. Keep it up! :D

"Just do it"

'The book of NIKE: 21:53-4'

Ok, so you know your 'Still Alive' parody thing you wrote? Is it okay if I record myself doing it, then post it here as a kind of supporting thing for your story? I just feel like doing it :P

No, you only need Source SDK IF you are on PC. Mac users also need HL2.