My newest custom story!! I work really hard on it and i try my best, so im want it to be awesome! The game is coming soon, and i hope you care about my new story.
This has the basis of a mod. There were many problems but i don't see why in the future, if you work on these issues and improve on every aspect you've created in this mod you can generally come out with a good Custom Story.
Considering you're 14 year old, i'd say this is okay for a 2nd CS.
Positives:
- Attempt to create a storyline
- Some decent scares
- The puzzles were harder than expected
Negatives:
- Lame monster encounters
- The story is weak and illogical in many ways
- A lot of level design fails
- How am I supposed to unlock the desk door?
- You can interact with the grass at the first map, making it really buggy
- What did I need the silver key in the dining room for?
- I entered the dungeon and the door I came through disappeared?
- I had to cheat to beat the devil
- Your english can be highly improved
Conclusion:
I played your first story and it was bad. You said this one was supposed to be better but I can honestly not see a huge difference. Your first story had a naked guy, this one didn't, although this story had monsters that appeared in front of my face for no reason, no billboards like your first story, a lot of level design mistakes and nothing make sense whatsoever.
What I'm trying to say is, you improved some things while some other things are worse than your first story. It seems like you learned something and forgot about other things.
3/10 - Bad
Ugh, I appreciate the effort, but I encountered a bug that got me softlocked in the cellar because I accidentally went down after coming back up, why are you even allowed to go back down? I imagine I didn't miss much anyways, I wasn't really impressed up to that point.
I'm going to use this same method as someone else I saw in the reviews.
Positives:
-First map looked pretty good, to be honest
-Puzzles were surpisingly good
Negatives:
-English was terrible, along with tons of typos
-Last areas looked like pure c**p
-Weak and cliché storyline
Storyline: ✕
Go to a house, where a family has been killed. A bit cliché, but not the worst. 4/10
Level design: ✕
House itself was good, but the last two maps- omg. Did you even try? No roof, no walls, nothing. Doors had no frames. 3/10
Puzzles: ✔
Puzzles were good! Not only key quests- also acid puzzle and hammer puzzle too. Good on that aspect ^^ 7/10
Scare factor: ✕
Not scary the slightest. Few poor scares also- that's it. 2/10
Atmosphere: ✕
Kind of bad. Music was found everywhere I believe, but it was not scary and no ambiences either. Bland. 3/10
Overall:
Not close to the worst mod I've played. Still not good either.
Score: 3,8 = 4/10 - Below Average
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