Does this game description need fixing? Thread

Here is Game description:


-Go through the colorful mountain paths, as fast as possible to escape the flying thorns.The faster you run the more chances you have to survive!Do not look back, jump to paths the same color as the character, otherwise, you will not survive! Along the way collect the coins to unlock new characters!



Yeah, I feel like my game description is ok, but not exactly sure what to change? Need some help, any suggestions would be great. Its actually already on ios and android, which makes me feel like I need to change something sooner.

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-Go through the vibrant mountain paths as fast as possible to escape the flying thorns.The faster you run, the more chances you have to survive! Don't look back, leap to the colored paths that match your character. Otherwise, death is inevitable! Collect coins on the way the to unlock new characters!

This would be my take on the description you gave. Hope it helps!