Follow the adventures of Milena and her psychic teddy bear totem in a world where psychics and normal humans coexist. In this adventure she enters into a mysterious realm inside a painting and must try to find her way back out into the real world amidst the labyrinth of intrigues and conspiracies inside the painting world.

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zonbie
zonbie

This all looks great. The content looks rich and thorough. But do you want us to pinpoint typos and grammatical errors? I mean, will this content be visible in the game? If so, the errors should be cleared away.

I also think the Origins section could use a bit of revision. The first sentence could be rewritten to save some space and clarity. The phrase "very" in "...governed by a very different subset..." could be removed to make the text sound more professional. And introducing WIT would constitute introducing a new theory to replace or contest quantum mechanics.

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Kremator_

Good idea, I haven't had the chance to get this proof-read by any english native speakers (english is not my first language) and will do so for future entries!

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