You haven't heard from your family in over a month. Your letters have gone unanswered. Worried, you decide to visit the old estate and see what has happened...
Positives:
- Creative storyline
- Custom monsters
- Good atmosphere
Negatives:
- A lot of missed opportunities
- Monster's AI is pretty bad (although you said you plan to fix this)
- You say it's not a copy of the vanilla study. It's not a copy, but you could have done more
- No intro
I love to see new original content for Amnesia still coming out. One thing I always disliked about the Amnesia community is the huge lack of creativity. There are some amazing mods out there, but most mods are like "U have amnesia in unkown castle u must escape" or a jigsaw clone.
You wanted to see if you could make an original mod in a day and did so in about 8 hours. I have played several mods with a time limit, and I can say, most of them aren't good.
This mod is one of the few that succeeds relatively well, but you could have made an amazing mod if you only spent more time on it. There are many missed opportunities. The ending felt very rushed and underdeveloped, it was never really explained what happened to the rest of the family after they left the mansion, what the experiment really was about and so on.
I also feel like you could have done a little bit more with the map. It's good, but it looks way too similiar to the vanilla study. You told us you used that map so it didin't come as a surprise, but I have seen people take maps from the original game and edit them so much to the point where they don't even look similiar anymore. This map, while indeed not a copy, looks very similiar ^^.
Conclusion:
It's not a "You woke up with amnesia in random castle, escape jigsaw clone's evil plans". It's a creative, original mod, so it deserves more than an average score in my book. Although it is underdeveloped due to the time limit you put on yourself.
7/10 - Good
This was really well put together. Though, the story seemed to lack a bit, and became a bit vague for me. I never really saw a true conclusion, but that is just me. A bit short too (lets face it, when i really enjoy a CS, i want it to last) :D
SOLID 8/10. Would have been higher if i got a better understanding why things were going on in the story. Again, thats me though. lol
I enjoyed playing it, but nothing more.
Considering of course that this was made in a day, I'm giving it 7/10. Good job! I wish it was longer, it had a lot of potential.
Pretty good mod and good storyline.
+ Unique storyline
+ New monsters
+ New concept
- Underdeveloped ending
- Monster AI is bad
- Very short. Took me 10 minutes.
- Recycled study room from original game
Amazing monsters though was a little short.
The atmosphere was there, but it was short! Kinda bummer from my side since I was kinda enjoying the custom story.
I really hope you're going to take this experience and use it for a better Custom Story some day. :)
I had fun playing it. Also the story was okay at all. It seems like a test so I will only write this review to give you tips for the next time.
Btw I see you used assets from (I think it was) Kaernk. Did you ask him if you could use them? Be careful with using assets from other people since it can make people really angry. A really awesome custom story score got ruined because of it (ENIGMA) and even tho he removed them they left their "1" scores. Pretty childish but sadly it's like that. Tho you can use it from Kaernk I guess. Just saying.
Lets get into it then:
First off don't let the player just spawn into the map. It looks unfinished.
Secondly you should make sure not to make things look sloppy like the pigs in the fourth map hanging from the ceiling. The problem there was they were all facing the same direction and it isn't really looking good at all. Doesn't need to be realistic since it's a game but make it look good at least (with that I mean everything you do while mapping).
And finally remember to delete downloaded files. With that I mean the .rar file which was in the folder and just took up space. :D
In conclusion: It was a well made custom story and the mapping was good as I've seen so far. I can't say much about the mapping tho as you used rooms that were already made.
If you make rooms yourself sometime maybe don't forget to make it look filled up or messy and don't make them look blocky. It will take alot of time. =)
9/10. I will see forward for future custom stories from you.