Also known as "Marcusyaho" Action/horror gamer and level designer. I can help you with more or less any Amnesia scripting and Level editor problems. I'm also available if you need a map tester
Mod Review on Mar 3rd, 2014 - 1 person agrees
- Not a regular "you wake up in an unkown castle" story
- No lame jumpscares
- 95% key quests
- Plain, no details, boring and repeditive gameplay
- Short story and very smal maps
- Missing ceiling in the flooded map and the water texture made no sense
- Notes made no sense
- Lame and rushed ending
What to improve:
While the levels are relativly free from texture glitches, the maps in this story are very empty and have no details at all. It seems like you were lazy and placed a couple of barrels somewhere and then just copied them because they are all placed and rotated the same way everywhere.
The flooded map. First of all, it was extremly obvious that a water monster was coming, but what really got my attention where your texture selection and missing ceiling. Why does it look like it's a river? It's inside a house...
Both the archive and "chemical lab" were so extremly rushed and lame. The archive - wow, two bookshelfs and the same book copied like 7 times, magically floating on the water surface.
"Chemical lab" - no chemicals what so ever and the monsters left a button which could destroy the whole facility if you click on it (TV cartoons in a nutshell). You should also add pillars at the end of walls so we can't see through them.
Add more than just key quests, please. And the crowbar (during the crowbar quest) is placed at the wrong side of the door.
The first note is made by me, right? So, why did I write it and then picked it up? Makes no sense. The two notes in the mansion map made no sense either to be honest. Looked like an advanced puzzle. Turned out all I had to do was finding a key.
You though of a story and it wasn't bad for a first made CS, but I rate all stories the same way and to be honest, this one was boring and empty. I decided to give it a 3/10 anyway though because it's a good start and you have potential.
3/10 - Bad
Mod Review on Feb 28th, 2014 - 1 person agrees 1 person doesn't
I have already asked you this twice on your previous parts, but I have to ask you again. Why do you waste your time on ******** stories like this?
You show so much creativity and the level design is actually generally good, but the story line is garbage and the scares are terrible. Even the scares are creative, but they are still lame and predictable jumpscares.
I rated part I and II 4/10. Both the level design and some of the quests are really well made (so well done you even inspire me), but you have not improved at all in the slightest otherwise.
PLEASE, if you are going to make a story in the future, STOP making lame jumpscare stories! Not only are they extremly overused, but they suck. If you just took your time to make the scares and story line good as well, I'm sure I would love it and rate it 8-9+.
4/10 - Okay
Mod Review on Feb 18th, 2014
- Good level design
- Creepy atmosphere
- More than one ending
- The classic "you wake up somewhere unkown". You did it well, but it's still lack of originallity
- Some puzzles were a bit hard to solve
- Drill did not have a description or name when it was fixed
- Really annoying when you force the player to turn around and look at the chasing monster
- Possible to speed run the story in 2-4 minutes (read conclusion)
For a first story it's actually really good! The level design is not unique, but you definitely spent a lot of time on it.
The story, despite the lack of originallity, turned out to be really well made as well.
On a little side note. Please, don't force the player to look at the chasing monster! I was running forward, the character automaticly turned around and I ended up running towards the monster instead.
And when I encountered the curtain bug, I eventually tried to bug myself to the next part of the story using barrels. It turned out I was able to barrel bug me so much so I could speedrun the story in around 2-4 minutes when doing the escape ending. The whole glitching through doors using barrels can be done in more or less every story so it's not really your fault, I just wanted to point it out.
7/10 - Good
Mod Review on Feb 18th, 2014
Since you told us it is going to be a troll story full of jumpscares, I'm not going to rate it a low score simply because it was a jumpscare story. But...
- It was scary sometimes
- A few creative areas
- Level design is boring and repetitive (with exception of the big grunt head part)
- 80% chase of monsters are in chase scenes
- Only key quests
- No story at all except for a brief description
- Low creativity (when it comes to quests, story etc)
Boring, repetitive and if you hate jump feasts and troll humour, a huge waste of time.
3/10 - Bad
Mod Review on Feb 11th, 2014 - 1 person agrees 1 person doesn't
- Good level design at some places
- Custom sounds
- Floating objects, glitches and lame mapping at certain places
- Nothing but jumpscares
- No real story line except "you must get out" which is overused
- Monsters spawned infront of my face
- The exploding part made no sense
What to improve:
- You guys are very creative, but a lot of items are floating in the air, a lot of textures are glitchy (colliding with each other), and certain parts are just lame. Like when you crawl through a tunnel and see a level door at the end of it.
- Don't use only jumpscares. I am so used to them so I did not get scared even once, but I'm sure a lot of people were by the first 1-3 jumpscares, but eventually even scared players gets used to them.
- Make something else rather than the same old "you wake up at an unknown place, you must get out".
-"Read Nicholas notes, he will tell you where to go". Found 2 notes from him, and none of them really told me what to do.
It's just another jumpscare feast with lame scares and monsters spawning infront of your face. Some people said "the scripting is good". I barley saw any scripting except the quests and jumpscares. And it's not very surprising when the script files are 1-8KB huge at most.
The difference between this story and other lame jumpscare stories is the level design. Sadly though, I found a lot of floating items and texture glitches.
It's simply a bad story, not more, not less.
3/10 - Bad
Mod Review on Feb 9th, 2014 - 3 people agree
Trails of the Toymaker delivers creative challanges and level design at it's finest. But I can't stop asking myself where the story line is. It barley is one.
You gave yourself a challange to see what you can make in two weeks, but that doesn't necessarily mean you have to upload it. If it weren't for the amazing level design and intresting ideas, I would probably not have liked this in the slighest, but even though it lacks what every single custom mod should have (not to mention how short it is), it still amazes me, and if you make a story in the future, I will be glad to play it.
Oh yeah, and by the way, don't do like The Chinese Room did, make nothing interactable. Being able to pick up stuff is one of many reasons why Amnesia is what it is today, don't take that away from us.
7/10 - Good
Mod Review on Jan 29th, 2014 - 5 people agree 1 person doesn't
This story is absoutely amazing! It really looks like you spent a lot of time on it.
Level design is stunning and the story is intresting. Not the scariest story I've played, but thanks to the well made atmopshere, it was pretty tense anyway.
The only "bad" things I can say about it is:
The quests were relativly easy. Some of them required some logic thinking, but still not very advanced and not hard to solve.
You don't use any supplies at all (tinderboxes, oil, sanity potions etc). They were not really necessary untill the "boss" battle (which were a challange), but they do give players a reason to explore more than required. As it is now, all I have to do is get what I need and move on. I don't need to search that extra room or check behind the pile of crates because it's nothing there anyway.
The final score is 9 because of the huge creativity and really intresting story line. And because I couldn't find any serious glitches and gamebreaking bugs.
9/10 - Awesome
on Jan 24th, 2014
- 4 people agree
1 person doesn't
This review may contain spoilers
- You know how to use custom stuff
- Short, super lame story
- Based on a youtuber
- Boring and rushed level design
- No challange
- Author does apparently not know how to bug test his own story
It's based on a youtuber. Do you need more information than that?
I took me around 15 minutes to reach the end. 20 minutes if you count that time I got stuck in the first Minecraft map and had no other option but to restart the story. Instead of walking down to the lava, I decided to randomly jump around which was enough to bug the story out completely.
The first key description is so long it's not even visible.
You must use the knife at the right angle on the prisoner. And funny part is, he didn't even die when I stabbed him.
I died by the suitor at the end. Death hint: "Mark died by lava".
This guy's humour is terrible, but the reasons why I only rate it 2/10 is because there is absoutely no point with it. Just some random, rushed maps with no challange or creativity in them at all. You know how to use custom items, but that is the only positive thing I can say about this story.
Next time, don't make a story for a youtuber because they are never appreciated. Second of all, don't rush with them (every map is around 2-3 mintues long each), add more details and most importantly, make a good story line.
2/10 - Really bad
Mod Review on Jan 20th, 2014 - 2 people agree
- A story
- A few custom musics and voice acting
- You made an intro
- Lack of ambient sounds and details
- Not very scary
- Lack of scripting
- A lot of level mistakes and glitches
- Really frustrating maze
- Bad ending
What to improve:
I was expecting the level design to be better than this considering the fact that several people worked on it. It has a lot of mistakes, like not making chairs/beds/tables with static props on them into static props, a few floating items and a lamp on the second floor which moved around like crazy. And most importantly, add more details and effects.
Also, while making the explosives, where did I get the second glasjar from when I used the knife on the pig? And why did I have to mix it in a glasjar and then put it in a metal container?
While your scripting is working perfectly fine, it feels to me like you could add more scripted events. Can be anything from scary sound effects to dust falling down from the broken ceiling. You have a few scares, but most of them are monster encounters.
The story is different from other stories that's for sure, but everything else is average. Voice acting, scares, level design, it's nothing really unique about it. It's not good, but it's not bad either.
5/10 - Average
Game Review on Jan 13th, 2014
I truly enjoyed this game. The plot is very unique and a lot of the times pretty touching and intense. I love the graphics, I love the characters and I love the fact that the game is, to a certain extent, based on your own choices.
This is a game I will remember and I recommend it to anyone that wants a creepy and challenging game in which you choose what you want the character to say and do.
10/10 - Masterpiece