Also known as "Marcusyaho" Action/horror gamer and level designer. I can help you with more or less any Amnesia scripting and Level editor problems. I'm also available if you need a map tester
on Jun 16th, 2015
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- Good level design for the most part
- Hard puzzles
- Cliché storyline
- Only one type of monster + one boss
- Boss looks like the eye from lord of the rings ^^
- Some soundtracks are from sites with free music (in other words, not made by yourself)
- Some floating objects
- Very short, with no replay value
- Rushed ending
- Zero character development (I don't even know the name of the character I played as)
Astray offers hard puzzles and horror, but lacks in everything else.
The level design is pretty good, but several objects such as books and mushrooms are floating in the air.
You made one single enemy (excluding the boss) and used it over and over again. It was very scary at first, but after encoutering it over and over again, I learned pretty quickly how it behaves and could easily avoid it with zero deaths after a few maps.
The storyline is yet another "we found a mysterious artifact with evil powers" we all have played a thousand times before, one of them being Amnesia The Dark Descent, but what really ruined it for me was the huge lack of character development. In fact, there aren't any. The main goal is to find my uncle, right? I found one dead body near the end of the game, not knowing if it was him or someone else from the expedition, and the character I played as showed no emotions about it what so ever.
I think this game puts too much faith in us as players, that we will take the role as the main character and react for him.
The ending was pretty weird and suddenly turned into a black screen with the credits printed on it. I hate when game developers don't put enough time with outros, and this game developer sure didn't.
But you did a good job with the puzzles and it was very scary for me. At least before I got used to the monster, but as I said earlier, it lacks in everything else. It doesn't offer much new to the table besides the puzzles and a few intresting level design ideas.
Glad I bought this game during the summer sale because it took me less than 3 hours to complete it, even though I spent quite some time with some of the puzzles.
4/10 - Okay
on May 13th, 2015
- 5 people agree
6 people don't
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- Good custom music
- Good level design
- Intresting ideas
- Super short mod
- Story is generic and the ending is terrible
- No challange whatsoever
"The story is well developed. It includes voice acting, and custom music. Scripting is innovative"
It has a flower scene and generic "I love you do you love me back" scenarios and is suddenly ruined by a "Liek if u cri evrytiem" ending. How is that "well developed"?
It looks like you began working on a good story, but eventually lost all your motivation and decided to end it quickly. It's probably just a joke, but lame stories deserves lame reviews.
All your other stories are masterpieces, I didn't expect this from you ^^
Liek if dis story is lame evrytajm
3/10 - Bad
on Apr 28th, 2015
- 1 person agrees
1 person doesn't
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- Some nice scripting
- A few areas looks decent
- Good voice acting for the most part
- The level design is mostly terrible
- Super repetitive gameplay
- 80% key puzzles
- A huge amount of glitches and bugs
- Can sometimes not hear diary readings because of the music
- Lack of mementos
- Often not clear what I have to do
Neutral: (Does not affect the score)
- I didn't like the custom music. It felt like a lot of soundtracks didn't fit the maps, or was way too loud which caused me to not hear the voice acting sometimes
What to improve:
Level design and glitches:
I know it's not "reality", but even so, the quality of the levels are really low. For the most part, at least. Some areas are decent, like the church. Other maps on the other hand are so glitchy and bad it makes me wonder if you even tested your story before you uploaded it.
For instance, a lot of areas have "holes" in them (floors and walls not correctly connected to each other). I went into a prison cell only to see that only half of the cell have walls around it. Are you serious? Then I look up at the ceiling and sees that it's made of 0.01 meter thin wood.
The worst bug I found was when I went into the church, the suitor spawned and a cave in appeared at the corridor I came from. I ran into the room and the suitor got stuck and couldn't do anything. Eventually, I decided to let him kill me so the chase music and his glitchy *** could go away. I respawned behind the cave in and could not continue.
Lack of mementos:
I have never been in the level editor so many times to finish a story as I did with this story. The lever puzzle made no sense to me, and many other puzzles seriously lack mementos or made no sense.
I turned three valves in the sewer and thought the water would drain. Instead, a key came down from the pipe. Since it was under water, rusty, and no memento was given, getting that key took way longer that it should have.
Another great example is the village map (with the graveyard). I found three ladders and had to place it against a wall. You gave me no mementos at all or no other hints where I had to place the ladder. I thought I had to climb over the fence to the graveyard and eventually decided to check the level editor after ten attempts to use that dam thing.
Find a key, solve a puzzle, find a key, chase scene, use the key, find a new key.
It was really difficult for me to continue. If it wasn't for the voice acting and the storyline, I most likely would have stopped playing after 2-3 maps.
Every map is the exact same thing. You should variate a little more, or it gets really boring after a while.
If you are looking for a story with great level design or intresting gameplay, this story is not for you.
However, if you want a special story with good voice acting, this story might be for you though.
All in all, the story is below average and needs a lot of fixing to be good.
4/10 - Okay
Mod Review on Apr 5th, 2015 - 1 person agrees 2 people don't
- Creativity (sad you used your creativity to create something like this)
- You play as pewdiepie
- Lame and super cheap scares
- Nothing makes any sense
- The story (if you can call this a story) is terrible
- "It's okay to be gay" music you are forced to listen to
- Glitches everywhere
It makes me sad to see the author of the decently good story The Castle in the Woods I gave 6/10 on also made something like this.
It's yet another "you wake up in an unkown place, get out" type of story. On top of that, you also play as Pewdiepie. It's like any other "troll" story with very low effort put into it.
1/10 - Pointless, not recommended to anyone.
Mod Review on Mar 14th, 2015
- Some scary moments
- Some areas are designed decently
- Custom items
- You can interact with stuff around you
- Story is almost non-existing
- Maps are way too short, inluding the story itself
- Most parts lack details
- Nothing makes sense
What to improve:
Since you're a new level designer, I'm going to go into detail and explain what you should think about untill next time and why.
Some areas are actually decent and I like the penumbra style some of the maps have, but most of the maps lack details and are way too short. Each map took me 5 seconds up to max 5 minutes to complete. Not only is it annoying to have to sit through a loading screen over and over again, but we never really get to immerse ourselfs into the maps, since they end so quickly.
If you're only going to make a corridor and nothing else, make that corridor into the map you already have for example. You don't need to make a whole map just for one short corridor.
I would also like to see more puzzles. Puzzles that makes sense! I saw a locked gate, went into the office map and did absoutely nothing in there, since there was nothing I could do, went back and the gate was suddenly open. Same thing happened in a different map. A door was locked, I ran around the map a little bit, exploring. Suddenly, the door unlocks itself automaticly.
Be more creative. Make up something more realistic. Maybe the player can activate the gate by using a computer? Or finding spare parts in a storage room? Hell, even key quests would be better.
It would also take a little longer to complete each map if you added more puzzles.
Add a little more details to your maps. Can be anything from fog, some debris, decals etc. You did add some sound effects though, which really increased the creepiness.
The story is very cliché. "You don't remember who you are or where you are" is so overused. It can still be intresting though if you add intresting plot twists, an antagonist and good character development. Sadly, this custom story really lacks all of that. I understand it's just chapter one, but the story barely developed at all.
What you did good:
Player can interact with stuff. Like, if you click on the bed, a computer, a corpse etc, the character will say something about it. I like that.
The dark map with all the corpses was actually really scary. I also like the build up. It took a while before the monster showed up. First it was okay, then a little creepy, more creepy, then that really dark map, then the encounter. Good job on that!
You also added a short intro and some custom material, something not a lot of new mappers do.
Average maps with a cliché story. While it had it's scary moments and has some creative ideas, the story in general doesn't offer much new on the table.
3/10 - Bad, but okay for a first story.
Mod Review on Feb 24th, 2015 - 5 people agree 2 people don't
- Author did not even try to make something good
I got cancer by playing this mod. You will hear from my lawyers shortly.
1/10 - Pointless, probably a troll mod
Mod Review on Nov 29th, 2014 - 2 people agree
- Flawless voice acting
- Emotional story
- Custom music (and pretty good to)
- Very short (took less than half an hour to finish)
- Not very clear what to do, lacks mementos
- Level design is pretty average
Krypton141 sums up this story perfectly. The voice acting is very good. Sounds like something out of a movie.
The story is good, but way too short. I really feel like you could have added more events, or made the events you have a little longer. It took me less than half an hour to complete it. It usually takes around that time to get immersed, and before enemies usually shows up in the longer, well made stories.
Level design is way too average. Nothing special about it at all, but the custom, never used in a story before music really weight it all up.
If you make a new story in the future, add more details to your levels and make the story a little longer and I will absolutely play it.
7/10 - Good
Mod Review on Nov 18th, 2014 - 2 people agree
- Level design is relatively glitch free (texture glitches)
- You added music
- Story is almost non existing
- Minimum scripting in each map
- Music is incredibly repetitive
- Some glitches (gameplay glitches)
- No creativity at all, maps are bland and simple
- 95% key quests
What to improve:
The only story line in the whole mod are notes from an unkown person, and even those are pointless and doesn't explain what's going on. Maybe the story would make a bit more sense if I played the first part first, but the first part is nowhere to be found.
You should, if you want to make a new mod, make a story. A story that isn't a cliché "you are kidnapped and must get out". It looks like you couldn't figure anything out and made up a few notes with 1-4 lines at most to make it look like you at least did put some effort to it. Having no story or almost no story at all doesn't make the player very motivated to keep playing your mod.
Good thing you add music, but you picked music that is usually used when you complete puzzles, during events or when you enter a new area. Songs that are less than twenty seconds long makes it very repetitve and annoying to listen to.
Level design is so bland and empty and 95% of the quests in the story are key quests. On top of that, you use a minimum amount of script. I looked it up and each script folder is 3kb or less. Some of my map scripts can be way over 30kb.
I don't demand it to be that large, but I would like to see at least some more scripting than 3kb per map or less. Add some effects, more scares and monster encounters, more quests, etc.
Also, try to mess around with the levels, add decals, decorations (carpets, pillars, plants, statues, anything to fill up the empty parts) and don't make the rooms bigger than they need to be.
I have two glitches in mind. First one is in the second map. It looks like the brute doesn't have any path nodes to follow because it walked around wierdly or was standing at walls (because it doesn't figure out it can go out from the room through the door). Perhaps you were lazy, but it may be a glitch as well since other monsters have paths to follow.
Second glitch was at the bookshelf in the cellar I was supposed to move by interacting with it. You may need to move it a tiny bit higher up becaue it got stuck a few times on the floor. It took a couple of attempts even after I removed all books and other items from it.
I don't think this is much better than the previous story I played "Wanted", but at least that story actually had a story, even if it made no sense.
I can't recommend this story in it's current state. It's way to bland and doesn't offer anything new on the table.
2/10 - Very bad
Mod Review on Nov 16th, 2014
This story makes no sense whatsoever and I will explain why further down.
"You are Aidan, an electrician"
1: Electricity does not exist in the storys timeline
2: His job doesn't change the story in any way shape or form. He could have been anything and the story would still be the same
3: He goes back to his apartment and sees police cars, and decides to leave the estate? What?
The story wasn't too wierd untill I went to the cellar, on the second floor. The door locked itself and Aidan instantly assumes that someone else must have locked it even though no one else is in the castle.
I found a sparekey and a key to the prison.
I go to the prison, see that every door except one is blocked by walls and enters the only room that isn't blocked, picks up a key and leaves the map.
I use the key I found on the entrance door. It breaks and I decided to try to unlock the door with the sparekey instead and it worked. Why not use the sparekey to begin with, instead of going to the prison first?! And who the **** have a prison inside an apartment building?!
I go outside and instead of just running away, decides to go to the hospital, steal a crowbar, magically unlock a office door like a regular key, get scared by body parts inside a closet before opening it, finds a secret tunnel, enter a room with 3 pictures and a door, nothing else, enters the door and climbs up a well without a ladder (by the way, the area around the well is so terrible glitchy it's probably the ugliest thing I've seen in a story ever) and goes back to the estate...
This time however, I go to a different area of the estate only to find a hole in the ceiling I climb up to using a rope I found lying on the ground. The one and only monster in the whole story spawns but is too slow to do any harm at all, I leave the estate yet again and the story is over.
The story makes no sense at all and the level design is below average. You have a long way to go before you can make a good story.
Work more on the story and make it more logical and practice more with the level design.
What saved you from a 1/10 is the fact that you don't have a **** load of lame jumpscares like many mediocre stories have, don't use the names "Daniel and Alexander" and you don't have glitches everywhere with a few exceptions, like the part with the well, but it was okay otherwise.
3/10 - Bad
Mod Review on Nov 6th, 2014 - 1 person agrees
- Love the anime artstyle for the character
- A lot of new content
- Level design, besides having a lot of custom stuff, is too basic
- The store felt slightly pointless, as it was so near the end anyway
- Very short
- Story was quite basic as well
You never disapoint me! This story is Another great mod. I really enjoyed it. The level design and story was a bit too basic, but the gameplay, creativity, custom content and the level of fun weight it up a lot.
9/10 - Awesome