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Shade_Vortex
Shade_Vortex Zandu Khar Clan Leader
May 30 2005 Anchor

"Zandu Khar Source (Source in the title because that's the engine it'd be on, duh.): The Great War (Working Title)" Is a Half-Life 2 Mod idea I've had for quite a while, and it is suppost to be a 3rd-1st Person Shooter, with Action and Adventure/Platformer elements in it, and maybe some puzzles and fighter/hack and slash element, too... But would mostly be bent on it's Single Player mode for a great and long Storyline, but the Mod would be able to go online... But anyway, here's the Story idea:
A long time ago a War of massive size was started between the Universes, the Universal War, codenamed "The Great War", in this War the Zyrnians and the Zandurkians fought against each other recruiting lifeforms throughout the Universe to fight in the War, the War went on for more than 10,000,000 Years... Some say, it went on for eternity... But one day the War was almost forgotten, hidden away from the known world of Earth... Earth had just advanced it's technology very far in Biological Engineering, mainly the Xion Mutation Laboratories Corporation (XML Corp) was experimenting on the lifeforms of the Planet, even later on in the Earth's life, when it had moved from it's own Universe, (Known as the Gaia Universe.)to the Draddek Universe, it then was renamed Drakia in honour of Xion Max Power's latest experiments, the Drakens... These Half-Human Dragons were mutated from Humans, although none knew this... They were the first beings to realize The Great War had only just been unmentioned... As the War was set in a new Universe when Xion created other Mutants such as the Utants (Ultimate Mutations, shortened.), as a unknown being of Evil had let loose the new Mutants on the world and made them go on a rampage, now as Xion Max Power's son, (Jon Max Power) and the new recruite of the XML Corp's new Devision, the Genetics Originization Of Duties (GOOD.), it was established for the sole duty of exterminating Rampant Mutants.) you must exterminate the Mutants at any cost to protect the People of the Planet, will you be brave enough to fight this legendary War? Remember.... You are never alone in this fight.

Characters:

Xion Max Power:

Age:Unknown
Birthplace:Seatle City, now known as Drathnis Cave.
Side:GOOD
Occupation:Father, and Leader/founder of XML Corp and G.O.O.D.
Bio:His past not very well known, but he is an Immortal Human who Mutated his own self, and his Son to further Biological Engineering.

Jon max Power:

Age:18 at beggining.
Birthplace:Drathnis Cave.
Side:GOOD
Occupation:Private in the GOOD Army.
Bio:At birth he was Mutated after his Father, although he never knew he was actually an Human. On his 18th birthday his Father recruited him in the GOOD Army to stop the now Rampant Mutants.

Jason Exno Bhivera:

Age:25 at beginning
Birthplace:Bellevue City, now known as Swamp Dradikus
Side:Emperial Goverment (Not EVIL Corp.)
Occupation:Current Emperor

Lucifer Cyberus Vortex (Over other names... Such as Project "Dark Thunder", and Jolt, even Shade.):

Age:Unknown
Side:Engineering Vortex Imperial Leaders Corporation. (EVIL Corp.)
Occupation:Pharow, Emperor, Leader, and many more things in his life, but now is the EVIL Leader, and Founder.
Bio:His past a complete mystery to everyone and anyone, he is responsable for the Rampant Mutants and the blame on Robert Max Power.

Robert "Rocket" Max Power:

Age:Unknown
Side:Unknown
Occupation:Biological Engineer.
Bio:This man was soley blamed for the Rampant Mutants, for reasonable proof found nearby.

That's all the Characters I'm listing, don't want them all to be copied by some random idea stealer, XD...

Weapons/Accessories:

Nightmare Armor:A legendary Mutational Armor rumored to be created by GOOD.

Magic Amplifying Neurological Access enabler(MANA.) Compact Arm Bracelet (CAB.): It enables Magic control for
almost any Humanoid lifeform.

Genetic User controlled Alteration Recieving Device (GUARD.):A Device which uses a signal meant for recieving Genetic Data, and it can change the very
DNA structure of almost any being, this technology was built into the Nightmare Armor.

Vehicles:

Vortex:A Vehicle designed and created by the EVIL Corp, meant for all-area access because of it's shapeshifting powers.

Shadowscaper:A modified Vortex without Shapeshifting powers, but is highly advanced from the original Vortex.

And finally, the interesting stuff:

Jumping, Flying, Transforming, Driving, Killing, Shooting, Destroying, and other cool stuff are ideas.

What do you think? I might give a better description on the storyline, if anyone will help me carry on this idea into an actual Mod.

Sorry about the Purple text, I just like Purple, XD...

Edited by (in order): Shade_Vortex, Shade_Vortex, frosty-theaussie, frosty-theaussie, Shade_Vortex, Shade_Vortex, Shade_Vortex, Shade_Vortex

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frosty-theaussie
frosty-theaussie Sonny Jim
May 30 2005 Anchor

Sorry, I really wanted to read your post, and the purple text killed my eyes so I changed it. I find it pretty interesting, although some of the names are a bit odd. Also, the MANA pun I found to be somewhat humourous.

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Shade_Vortex
Shade_Vortex Zandu Khar Clan Leader
May 31 2005 Anchor

Only one person thinks this is a good idea? The complete story it's self took me about 10 years to make... Oh well, another idea down the drain, for now... Hahahha! I won't give up on this idea, ever... I am persistant beyond belief, anyone want the full story? I might post it sometimes, if it is requested. And thanks for the reply, frosty-theaussie, ^_^.

Edited by: Shade_Vortex

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n00dle
n00dle Q(i_iQ)
May 31 2005 Anchor

Keep it going man. I think it sounds awesome.

It's only been 1 day. Give it more time :D

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May 31 2005 Anchor

You can consider a lack of response as a good thing. if people dont like it they will let you know, and fast, and over and over.

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n00dle
n00dle Q(i_iQ)
Jun 1 2005 Anchor

lol, yeh

Be prepared for criticism. Dont give up though. If you want to see this game to come to life you have to work for it.

By the way, was this a request for help or just posting about your mod so people can see it and say if it's a good idea or not.

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Yeah lotta detail there, obviously well though out, good luck with it!

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Shade_Vortex
Shade_Vortex Zandu Khar Clan Leader
Jun 1 2005 Anchor

n00dle wrote: lol, yeh

Be prepared for criticism. Dont give up though. If you want to see this game to come to life you have to work for it.

By the way, was this a request for help or just posting about your mod so people can see it and say if it's a good idea or not.


I'm not requesting help, I am only stating my idea so people would know of it.

And I know to expect criticism... I will try hard to make this idea become a reality.

If this were a request, it wouldn't be a post, it would be a help request... I am going to try and learn Modelling or Mapping, that'd be a start, but I'd most likely make a website based around this idea first, which I'm actually planning on doing soon or later, just in case if I were to submit this Mod if I ever became a Team Member for a Mod, or even a Team Leader if I tried hard enough, at least then I'd be able to se my great idea come into existence, until then... I'll just stick to learn, practice, and perfect until I'm able to help out Mods, I know not to expect the best work from myself right away either.

Yeah, basically I'm only saying the idea, but you could help it become an actual Mod if you wanted to, although I'm not going to exactly ask for help until it's actually submitted as a Mod, which most likely might not be for a while, or not ever, depending if I change my mind and that stuff.

Edited by: Shade_Vortex

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n00dle
n00dle Q(i_iQ)
Jun 2 2005 Anchor

OK, sorry if that sounded negative. But yeh good luck with it :D

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Jun 2 2005 Anchor

I haven't read the post, just the title...why does almost every Half Life 2 mod have to have "Source" in the title? Does it somehow make the title cooler?

n00dle
n00dle Q(i_iQ)
Jun 3 2005 Anchor

Not all do. But most that do it is because they had a Half Life 1 version and the Source indicates that it is now for the Source engine. Other people add it to make themselves look hardcore.

kthxbi

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Shade_Vortex
Shade_Vortex Zandu Khar Clan Leader
Jun 4 2005 Anchor

Yeah, this idea has never been a Mod before, but I'll try to make it a Mod after/if I get the required skills to do so, and then I'd ask for a Team after submitting the Mod and (if) it gets approved, untill then... Want any more info? Just ask, I'll try to answer any and all questions about this idea.

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Slight bit of negativity, but what is original about this mod? Cliche's such as Xion don't make a good basis for a modification.

Shade_Vortex
Shade_Vortex Zandu Khar Clan Leader
Jun 6 2005 Anchor

Okay, did I ever say it was original? You try coming up with something "Original", you'll fail, because chances are, someone across the world had thought of it before you.

Trust me, there's no such thing as an "Original" idea today, Halo? Alien stories and other sci-fi stuff bundled together. Stargate? Theory of high-speed travel through Worm-holes. Nothing is original, because Humans have had a long time to think about many subjects, so if an "Original" idea was found, I'd be suprised. And you do know mosty Mod's are not even original at all, as most are based of existing things, like Counter-Srike was based off Counter Terrorism and Terrorism. So please don't nag me about originality, Xion's the name of a Bloody Roar Character, I know this... But this Xion's not pronounced "Gee-on", it's pronounced "Ex-e-on", and I may not have spelled that pronounciation correctly, but my point is, for the amount of quantity of things this idea has, then it's a kind of original concept, but most likely something like it may has been done before... I based this storyline off of Religeon, if the name Lucifer didn't make it obvious. At least this isn't another Dragon Ball Z Mod idea.

I'm not ranting, I'm stating the truth. A few more Characters I did not mention:

"Father" Naitha Lawneck:

Age:30-40 (Nobody knows really (They judge his age by his looks), but he's actually only 25.)
Birthplace:Exdencia, Galandia City.
Side:Goverment, Law
Occupation:Christian Priest, Court Judge.
Bio:At a young age this Exdencian was tought Christianity, he learned it well and became a Preist when he was older... He decided to learn the ways of the Law also, so he later doubled as a Judge, he is the only known Preist who was able to, or crazy enough to Christian Demons. He carries a Pen with a Blade and uses it to carve Spells and Protection Barriers into his Arm, it is very painful to do so.

Wow, Christian Demons, note that's pretty original, except it's most likely been done, but I wouldn't know.

"Angel" Jeniphilia Magalt

Age:Unknown.
Birthplace:GOOD Laboratory.
Side:GOOD
Occupation:Assassin, Soldier, MOSA Pilot.
Bio:Created in order to simulate what an Angel would be like if they existed, even though they do... But the Project was a success, so she was given a specific duty. One of the only Projects that did not go Rampant, oddly.

"Demon" Jayenbal Magalt

Age:Unknown.
Birthpalce:EVIL Laboratory.
Side:EVIL
Occupation:Assassin, Soldier, MOSA Pilot.
Bio:Created in order to fight against the Angel project, this project was a failure and was hastely disposed of, it was not their concern what happened to the project afterwords, none know if Demon still is alive.

"Ghost" Jacob Lithest (The original Ghost was Bob Max Power, but Jon Power changed Bob back to Human and gained Bob's "Nightmare" form.):

Age:18 at beginning.
Birthplace:Planet Earth/Drakia, Canada/Belnok Mountains, British Columbia/Ruins of Galia, Surrey City/Memorial Plain.
Side:EVIL
Occupation:Unknown.
Bio:One of the Mutations gone Rampant, believed to be one of the first Mutants of the XML Corp. Mutated to see what the supernatural being known as Ghosts would be like if they existed, even though they do. (Character made before Geist was even announced, to have you know, it's true.)

"Phantom" Benard Lithest:

Age:18 at Beginning
Birthplace:Same as Jacob.
Side:EVIL
Occupation:Unknown.
Bio:Brother of Jacob, he and his brother were Mutated near the same time in the same Laboratory, right beside each other... It was intentional that these brothers were mutated at the same peroid.

"Hex" Juliet Syphiest (The Syphiest family is somehow related to the Lithest family, will not explain this relation yet.):

Age:25 when she first shows up
Birthplace:Drakia, Javinyal City. (The first city to create the cyber world (Not a spoof on .hack!) that was found by Juliet.)
Side:GOOD
Occupation:Hex Master, GOOD Soldier.
Bio:She created an Armor suit that would allow Humans to enter the cyber wolrd, it looked nothign like she expected, but when she entered she noticed her technology had already been copied, there was an entire group of people called the "Enigma" Corperation that were in the cyber world, she had to fight against each one of those members in different parts of the Cyber world, and eventually met up with her old friend, "Hack"... But she had to fight him to get to "Enigma" himself.

"Hack" Jackson Ballandyar:

Age:25 when he first appears
Birthplace:Drakia, Javinyal City.
Side:EVIL, Enigma
Occupation:Traitor, Master Hacker, EVIL Soldier, Enigma Co-Leader.
Bio:An old childhood friend of Hex, he and her were workign on two different Armors, both of which would allow one to enter the Cyber world, and change it as they want... They were split up in an accident where Hack's Armor exploded and his Mother thought it was Hex's fault, so he moved away... After he recovered he recreated his suit, but correctly... And joined the Enigma Corporation and gave the technology to them... They mass produced it after perfecting it. They started up the first Cyber world, compsoed of a giant universe with different Planets as servers, each Planet had an element it was based on, but the Enigma Planet was all Elements in one.

"Enigma" Gignah Vortex:

Age:50
Bithplace:Planet Guildus, Tourentus City.
Side:EVIL, Enigma Corporation.
Occupation:Enigma Leader.
Bio:One of Lucifer's many Brothers, he created his own Corporation and teamed up with EVIL after the Enigma Corp's downfall, which was mysteriously caused by a rougue Hex Master that got away without being put in jail, even to this day Gignah hunts that strange Lady.

There's more Characters that were wrongly mutated for GOOD, or EVIL's own personal gain.

More Weapons/accessories:

Book of Christ:The holy Bible, the only weapon a Preist uses to fight with, except Father Naitha.

Book of Laws:One thing Fatehr Naitha would not go anywhere without, this Book has every Law possible in it, and is a Judge's most powerful Weapon besides their Title as Judge.

Bladed Pen:Used to carve Spells and Protection Barriers into ones Arm, not intended for killing purposes.

Angel-AE:Experimental Mechanical Organic Suit of Armor(MOSA), mainly driven by Angel, a Biologically Engineered Angel.

Demon-AE:See Angel-AE, only this MOSA is driven by Angel's Brother, Demon, a Biologically Engineered Demon.

Symbol(s) of Khul:The Khul Bulk have a symbol, differently shaped and coloured dependant of Khul Bulk, on their Forehead or Hands, dependant of Rank and Title. These gems give the Khul Bulk their powers, and without them are almost alike Humans.

The Legendary Armors (that I forgot to mention):The Dream Armor, the Demon Armor (Very different than the Demon-AE MOSA), the Angel Armor (Again, different than a MOSA.) and other Legendary Armors as the Hex Suit and the Hack suit, are all Legendary and powerfful Armors that are like the Nightmare Armor.

Note:The names Demon and Angel are only Project Codenames given by GOOD, or EVIL.

I know these names are not that original, infact Max Power is the least original thing to add to ones name, but I will keep thse names!

I might add more storyline stuff, but those weapons, accessories, and Characters should do for now.

Note:I began this storyline when I was only 5 years old, it took me until I was 7 to play a lot of games, and that's when somet things about the storyline began to tie in with other games, but I'm not directly copying anything, I'm only complimenting other stories by including similar content from them. And everyone knows Military Codenames are meant to be bad, XD....

There's a whole lot of sides to this story, and there is a lot more info I could say about it... But that would be like a book of text, yeah.. It's that long of a story.

Edited by (in order): Shade_Vortex, Shade_Vortex, Shade_Vortex, Shade_Vortex, Shade_Vortex, Shade_Vortex

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Jun 6 2005 Anchor

I can see you've thought this through alot which is very impressive. However, I partly agree with the other guys because in some cases as you can see, it looks like you've tried a little too hard with the storyline.

The cliche thing isn't too bad as long as its used correctly and not overdone, especially when trying to make it all tie in and make characters look cool.

A good example of how well its done is the MGS games. One thing that made it so successful were the cool villains you fought, and some would have special powers and stuff. Luckily Hideo Kojima decided to tie it in with real things and the realism of it allowed the special bad guys too look more amazing than cheesy. I'm not saying tie it in with real things in life, but just tweak up you ideas a bit, especially, as u said, the max power thing, and the whole Good and Evil project names.

Really looks like you took a lot of inspiration from Final Fantasy and a couple of other games, either way, a lot of good effort put into this.

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