The Old Guardian Thread

The Old Guardian

It was a time that monsters and madness took over the world.. No one knew why. No one knew where they were coming from. At nights even the mighty wolves feared to make a sound. Everybody could feel there were something wrong, something foul. Blood Mages moved through town to town, city to city and massacred innocent folk. They claimed their demonic god Naiarr was ordering them to do it so whay they do was just. They kept saying that "Her time will come and she will reward us for our faith." Warrior Clans, Holy Knights of the Order and The Guild of Dark Mages forged an alliance to put a stop to all this, but after years of war, they have failed. But there were still hope. The Old Guardian, a forgotten God, picked his Chosen One once again, this time a lonely yet selfless man called Cullen who was about to die from his battle wounds and gave him two options;

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Old Guardian - "Either die and be in peace or save your world and suffer until you die again."

Cullen - "Where am i? and who are you?"

Old Guardian - "I am the Guardian and where you are is irrelevant. You are chosen to save the world from the manace of the Naiarr and her Blood Mages. After that all her monsters will be gone and world will be at peace."

Cullen - "How could i possibly do that? How can i save the world?"

Old Guardian - "I cannot make you immortal or give you power, that's not how it works, no one can create something without dire consequences and your would cannot take any more wounds, but i can put you in the right direction so the chain of circumstances would give you a chance."

Cullen - "So that's all i get? Only a chance?"

Old Guardian - "Yes, wouldn't you rather take a chance to save the world?"

Cullen - "Than i will do it, for that cause, any pain and suffering i can endure."

Old Guardian - "In return i will give you a sword, a sword that will become a symbol. A sword to unite them under."

Cullen - "I don't want any rewards for this, i already died, i don't need any rewards."

Old Guardian - "So.. did you now? Anyhow, this is a reward that must be given."

Cullen - "And after all that?"

Old Guardian - "You will find the stone orb and you will become me.. But that's not important right now. You have a war and a destiny in front of you."

Cullen - "War with the Blood Mages and their mercenaries? Who is left to battle with the Blood Mages?"

Old Guardian - "Exactly.. You will have to free them first. Half of them are prisoners because blood mages need their blood and the other half is prisoner of their fears, they are hiding and are not willing to fight."

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This warrior was to recruit people to fight at his side so he could gather armies of the kingdom to fight once again. Not many was willing to fight. To them all was lost. Even if they defeated the blood mages, their demonic god Naiarr could not be defeated. All would be lost once again.

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Old Guardian - "When you wake up, you will see a girl standing beside you, 3 weeks have been past, they call her Liselle, she were taking care of you all this time, a good girl she is, maybe a little bit rogue.. If you ask my advise, you should recruit her. "

Cullen - "What if she doesn't want to join me?"

Old Guardian - "Then make her want to join you, it's all up to you, don't forget that."

Cullen - "Wait, what was that about that becoming you thing?"

Old Guardian - "Yes, what about that? (with a smile) But don't you need to wake up now? Until we meet again."

Suddenly Cullen had awakened, opened his eyes and looked at her, with one look he knew she is the one. He looked at her long enough to startle the girl;

Liselle - "You have finally woken up. Are you ok?"

Cullen - "I think i'm ok. Where am i?"

Liselle - "I found you wounded and moved you here to this nursery."

Cullen - "Wait, you are Liselle right? You have to join me, we have to unite the old alliance once again. A war is coming."

Liselle - "What?! A war? What are you talking about? And h..how do you even know my name? No one here knows my real name!"

Cullen - "I'm sorry, I genuinely don't know how to explain that, some being told me that i'm the chosen one and i'm to recruit you."

Liselle - "You expect me to join you just like that? I saved, healed you and you somehow know my real name but this is too much."

Cullen - "You healed me? You don't seem like a nurse."

Liselle - "I'm not, my Mother was, she thought me a lot. She died in the last war. When i found you, for some reason i felt responsible."

Cullen - "Thank you. Were you fighting at the Redfields battle?"

Liselle - "Redfields battle? No i wasn't."

Cullen - "What were you doing at the Redfields than? That's where you found me right?"

Liselle - "No i found you just outside town, Redfields is about a few weeks away from here. You couldn't possibly be there with all these injuries, you would not survive the trip here."

Cullen - "That somehow makes sense i guess."

Liselle - "How it does? "

Cullen - "Never mind that right now."

Liselle - "By the way, when i found you, you had this sword in your hand, i seen nothing like it."

Cullen - "That sword... feels somehow familiar.. like an old friend.. How strange."

Liselle - "Its yours isn't it?"

Cullen - "Yes.. It's mine i guess..

Liselle - "You are very strange you know that.. And you are most likely insane. You are lucky you seem like a good guy and if there is going to be a war i can't miss this.. I have to avenge my parents.."

Cullen - So.. anyway, will you join me?"

Liselle - "You are healed and i have nothing else to do.. so i can't see why not.. Just don't make me regret it."

Cullen and Liselle had left the nursery, they didn't know where to go from there.. It wasn't like the Guardian gave Cullen a hint or something;

Liselle - So... where are we supposed to go now? Where do we start?

Cullen - I'm not really sure.

Liselle - Wait, don't get me wrong, you got a fancy sword and everything, but as a chosen one shouldn't you at least know where to start?

Cullen - It's not like the Guardian gave me a map or something alright? I'm sure we will figure it out somehow.

Liselle - Just because you thi......

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Just when they were at the edge of town, Kings man showed up yelling;

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Kings man - Are you Cullen the Swordsman of the Warrior Clan??

Cullen - Yes, i am Cullen, was there something you need of me?

Kings man - MAN ARREST THIS DESERTER BY THE NAME OF YOUR KING!

Cullen - Wait! I did not desert!

Liselle - You kinda did..

Cullen - Liselle! You are not helping!

King man - SURRENDER! There is no were to escape for your kind!

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Two of Kings man approached from behind and one knocked Liselle out, other arrested Cullen who was in no shape to fight because of his wounds. Cullen found himself in a dark prison two days later. Stripped from this belongings and his sword. For a second there he panicked, but there were nothing he could do. Then a man in dark robes approached his cage and said;

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Fawkes - You are Cullen right? I'm Fawkes, i'm here to help you get out of here.

Cullen - Help me? Who send you?

Fawkes - I hoped you would tell me.. All i know is that i saw a vision and saving you is what i'm supposed to do. Take this key, wait for 10 minutes and then escape.

Cullen - You are not going to come with me?

Fawkes - I can't risk seen with you, i will meet you outside camp, by the tower.

Cullen - Wait, where is my belongings? I had.. I had a sword!

Fawkes - Whatever possession you had before you got here, they sold them and now drinking on it. Forget about them!

Cullen - That sword is important! Please trust me!

Fawkes - Alright, Alright.. I'll se what i can do. I will even ask around for your sword before i leave. Maybe i can learn who they sold it to. Just don't make me wait for long!

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Cullen waited for 10 minutes, left the dungeons and escaped through woods. Along the way he found a rusted sword and shield took them with him, just in case. Between him and the tower, there were a mercenary camp, he hated the idea yet he had to pass there, he tried to sneak but failed. He fought most of them but the last guy hit him from behind and was about to kill him, he looked for a way out, but couldn't see one, just when he accepted death once again Liselle appeared and killed the guy with an arrow.

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Liselle - I searched everywhere for you! How many more times do i have to save your life?

Cullen - Well, at least a few more times.. Maybe more.

Liselle - Haha - funny.. Do you have any idea what i went through? I'm just glad you are alright.. I was worried.

Cullen - Thank you Liselle.. I owe you my life.. Again... Now lets go, we need to find Fawkes.

Liselle - Fawkes? Who the hell is Fawkes?

Fawkes - That would be me ma'am. I'm sorry for being late.

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Edited by: thewarsend

...erm, did some grief the post or something? What did you write?

Hmm... not a bad idea, but I advise working on your grammar and prose. I'd look up actual scripts as reference. Also, it's holy, not holly.

Hope that helps.

Reqieumthefallen wrote: ...erm, did some grief the post or something? What did you write?

Hmm... not a bad idea, but I advise working on your grammar and prose. I'd look up actual scripts as reference. Also, it's holy, not holly.

Hope that helps.

thanks for the comment, i edited my first post a little..

Edited by: thewarsend

mmh. i thought it is storytelling?
"It was a time that monsters and madness took over the world.. No one knew why. " Why? Why and why are they here? ...the story is missing.

"Old Guardian - "I am the Guardian and where you are is irrelevant. You are chosen to save the world... " <--That is so boring. Don't know were, why,who and when, but save the world.
Were is the story now? Why must he save the world?? Allways the same, but this time, without story.
Give me an idea, to read your story. It might be a different, to tell a story or give content to a conversation.

You wrote this in 15 minutes. You don't read it twice and you don't sleep over it to read it again.
I am missing the story, why it happens. What are the talkers doing, while they are talking? were is the Place they are talking to each other?
waiting for more...

I am writing stories for over 25 years now, but I never give it to anyone, because:
everytime I read it again, I have to make a change or write something more to it, because I am missing something.

Mr.NiceKai wrote: mmh. i thought it is storytelling?
"It was a time that monsters and madness took over the world.. No one knew why. " Why? Why and why are they here? ...the story is missing.

"Old Guardian - "I am the Guardian and where you are is irrelevant. You are chosen to save the world... " <--That is so boring. Don't know were, why,who and when, but save the world.
Were is the story now? Why must he save the world?? Allways the same, but this time, without story.
Give me an idea, to read your story. It might be a different, to tell a story or give content to a conversation.

You wrote this in 15 minutes. You don't read it twice and you don't sleep over it to read it again.
I am missing the story, why it happens. What are the talkers doing, while they are talking? were is the Place they are talking to each other?
waiting for more...

I am writing stories for over 25 years now, but I never give it to anyone, because:
everytime I read it again, I have to make a change or write something more to it, because I am missing something.

i'm sorry but eighter your english is terrible or i just don't get what you are trying to say.. as "story is missing" part, this is a way of telling a story, writer reveals the story little by little as the story goes.. finding out whats really happening in the world is part of the story...

Nice idea but change Cullen, they Twilight reference will drag you down horribly.

squeedilyplays wrote: Nice idea but change Cullen, they Twilight reference will drag you down horribly.

I never watched twilight, Cullen is a reference to Dragon age, Ser Knight Cullen.